The basic premise is that after the workers (Vertullians) achieve citizenship and freedom from years of slavery, someone is killing them off, one at a time and stirring up questions amongst both workers and their former enemies, the Borali Alliance about whether they can all live together in peace. Our hero, Davi Rhii, former Borali prince, now a Captain in the Borali military, is sent to investigate the murders and report back to the Council of Lords. In the meantime, he faces a personal challenge in his developing relationship with Tela as their parents pressure them to marry and Tela resists his attempts to keep her safe. Aron, the first ex-worker to serve on the Council of Lords, has proposed making the worker religious holiday, The Returning, an official Alliance holiday to encourage a sense of unity, but now that plan is stirring up controversy. Meanwhile, Davi's exhiled Uncle Xalivar is content on regaining his power as High Lord Councilor of the Borali Alliance.
Beta readers will recieve a chapter at a time. I am using the system developed by AJ Hartley at www.magicalwords.net. Readers will read the chapter on either Word file or paper and mark passages using the following system:
A=Awesome. Something about this just blew me away. Excellent.
C=Confused. He said what? The people of Anth believed in what? He can get out of the rabbit burrow because…? Huh?
D=Don’t care. Ten pages on minor character’s lineage? So what? Yeah, I’m sure it’s really clever and all but… I’ve got QVC to watch.
You only need to mark the passages which evoke one of the four responses listed. Total honesty is requested. Don't worry about offending me. It's first draft--a lot of work will be needed before it ever sees a publisher's desk. And detailed explanations won't be demanded, although they can be helpful when offered. This allows me to get a sense of how you respond to the manuscript. I prefer people who have not read book 1 because I need a sense of how well I am trickling out the back story. Is it too much, too little?
I am writing about a chapter a week (22 pages on average). I would hope you could read each chapter within 2-3 weeks and get back to me. I can't pay you except to say I will acknowledge you in the book when it's published and I can offer you a free copy.
If anyone's willing, please get in touch. My beta readers on the first book said it captured the feel of "Star Wars: A New Hope" and really liked it. I hope you'll enjoy this as well. You'll be helping me write a better book and I'll also throw in a free e-copy of book 1 when you're done if you want.
Thanks for taking time to consider it and for your support of my work and this blog!